Summer Camp by Babygirl223

Review by erana

We're not here for fiction - we're here for INTERACTIVE fiction. Thus, dear writters and authors, your works here are to be rated not just based on you rliterary skills, but also based upon the interactivity of your work.

And this is hardly interactive. Railroad story with no choices - a couple of fake choices, which barely cause small differences for the text you'll see in the very next page and have no further effect whatsoever, with everything else being exactly the same.

Not even good writting can raise that kind of piss-poor "interactive" work past a 2. The admitedly good quality of the text is barely enough to avoid an 1 rating.

Review by This Big Hush

This is well written, but it is hardly interactive at all. I think there were three, maybe four choices all game, one seemed to be whether you wanted the graphic description or not.
It is a decent length, but will ocassionally flip from "I" to "you" and then back again.
It might have been a good idea to indicate the age of the character; makes a big difference if she was 17 or 13 (and living in the UK, I am not familiar with summer camps).

Review by AnonyPuss

A well written story about a girl's first time. I found it clever that the sex itself was so good, and what turned it into a traumatizing nightmare was not have underage sex, but how the adults handled it, and as a parent it made me think about how I should react if it was my daughter. Teenagers are going to have sex, it is only natural, and it is responsibility of the adults in their life to ensure it does not end up like that!

A few criticisms: It does flip from the second person to the first person about half way through; there are a lot of words that are capitalized that should not be; and the story is essentially linear (and that stops it being five starts).