Make A Mistake

''Welcome to //Made a Mistake//'' In this tale of woe, you will have to try your best ''not'' to make the aforsaid mistake. A few things you should know: - The way you act decides how others feel about you. Their opinions of you will not be stated openly, but will affect the availability of future decisions, as well as how they react to you. - You will not always be able to please everyone! This is important! - The same decision will effect different people in different ways - for instance, a decision that would make an easily befriended person instantly like you may only raise you slightly in the eyes of one less easy to please. - This is a massive project, and as such may contain some mistakes (ironically, considering the name!). Please try to enjoy it despite these issues. - This is my first project of this kind. I am very much an amateur. I am focusing on telling a story, rather than fancy coding and graphics. I am writer at heart. //This is an interactive story by FinchGold// //(link:"My Wattpad")[(gotoURL:"https://www.wattpad.com/user/Finch_Gold")]// New player? Click [[here to start.->The First Post]] Or {(if: $Saves contains "Slot A")[ (link: "Load game")[(load-game:"Slot A")] ]}

''Page 1 of 2'' //Posted yesterday by Glitterbug// I saw the footage. Think anyone who would be on these boards saw it. Does anyone have any clue how Dauntless is doing now? the media haven't been able to get any interviews that I know of, there's been no word from his official account. Tagged: ''Dauntless (Verified)'' //Posted yesterday by jennjean// ''Re: Anyone know how Dauntless is handling the defeat?'' No idea. You're right, he hasn't agreed to any interviews, nor has he posted. he's dropped off the map completely. nobody knows what's going on with him. //Posted yesterday by blackchat// ''Re: Anyone know how Dauntless is handling the defeat?'' I would also like to know. Following the post. //Posted 7 hours ago by evilebstard (Mod)// ''Re: Anyone know how Dauntless is handling the defeat?'' Pinned. Anyone with information please post it here. You click to open the text box, starting off a post of your own. //Posted a second ago by fireba11// ''Re: Anyone know how Dauntless is handling the defeat?'' I have some info. I know the guy. He's doing okay. Needs some recovery time, even with his powers he still gets hurt sometimes. Mentally, he just wants to go back and beat the bastard who did this to him. [[Next->Next]] (set: $one to true)

''Page 1 of 1'' //Posted a week ago by silvergreengecko// there's a new guy showing his power around the area. Not much seems to be known about him, was wondering if anyone had the info. I need to update the grimoire! //Posted a week ago by glitterbug// ''Re: Any information on the new villain?'' There's really very little known about him. For now, he calls himself Nightlight. With the ruckus he's been causing, I think Dauntless'll be after him soon. //Posted two days ago by poisonflower// ''Re: Any information on the new villain?'' As of this morning, he has officially beaten Dauntless, leaving him hospital-bound. This is the first time Dauntless has ever been beaten. One has to wonder what this means for the world. You click away, feeling sick to your stomach. Dauntless' reputation is in tatters, now that people know he can be beaten. You wonder if he will ever quite get over it, the first bitter taste of failure. Even if he never loses again, you think this will haunt him. [[Next->Next]] (set: $two to true)

''Page 1 of 412'' //Posted over a year ago by evilebstard (Mod)// Wow. there's a lot to say about this one. As Chosens go, he doesn't seem too bad. His debut was an interesting one. Any thoughts on him revealing his civilian identity? It was either a very clever or a very stupid move, depending on how he manages the response. His family are going to be mobbed. The chance of them being attacked is a high one, and I have to wonder how he's going to handle this. //Posted over a year ago by mordecai// ''Re: Dauntless Discussion Thread'' I have a feeling that the whole public identity thing is going to go very badly for him, and for his family. they are very obvious weak points. //Posted over a year ago by alibro// ''Re: mordecai'' At the same time, people will instinctively trust him more with one less secret. the levels of public support for him are phenomenal. His family didn't seem to know, they looked as shocked as we all felt. Wonder if he'll face backlash from them? //Posted over a year ago by mordecai// ''Re: alibro'' Backlash from the family? I think so. He's putting thm all in danger, including his twin sister. the parents can't be happy about that. Can't imagine the sister is going to be, either. This is going to majorly effect her life, for better or for worse. Again, you click away. Although you want to read on, to see if they say anything further about you, you know it won't be good. You will always be simply "the sister". Never anything more. Nobody will ever make a mention of you without it being due to your brother. You accepted this long ago, but it still stings. [[Next->Next]] (set: $three to true)

You click back to the main page. Where do you go next? [[Anyone know how Dauntless is handling the defeat?->Anyone know how Dauntless is handling the defeat?]] [[Any information on the new villain?->Any information on the new villain?]] [[Dauntless Discussion Thread->Dauntless Discussion Thread]] (if: ($one is true) and ($two is true) and ($three is true)) [[Next->New Message]]

Your laptop //pings// as a notification slides down from the top of the screen. Someone has sent you a PM. You click on it, reading the message. //Sent by daylight// Heya. Saw your post on ''Anyone know how Dauntless is handling the defeat?'' You seem to know him quite well. It's okay if you don't want to answer, but can I ask what you are to him? Like, a friend, or a family member, or...? [[Answer truthfully->The truth]] [[Lie->Lie]]

//sent by fireba11// ''Re: daylight'' Yeah, I'm the sister. Why do you want to know? //sent by daylight// ''Re: fireba11'' I'm just a fan of his. Of yours, too, actually. //sent by fireba11// ''Re: daylight'' A fan of mine? You feel a blush creep onto your cheeks. You have fans? You never realised. If you had, maybe you wouldn't have tried so hard to get people's attention. //sent by daylight// ''Re: fireba11'' Yep. I appreciate how difficult it must be, to have such a famous sibling, with you yourself being largely forgotten in the light of his brilliance. Maybe you even resent him a little - or a lot - for putting your family in danger the way he did. Maybe you feel like your losing him. //sent by fireba11// ''Re: daylight'' It //is// hard. Nobody ever thinks of that. But no, I don't feel like I'm losing him. I lost him a long time ago, when his powers first manifested. What are you, a psychologist or something? //sent by daylight// ''Re: fireba11'' No. Not a psychologist. I'm just good at reading people. It's a useful skill. If you need someone to vent to, I'm here. You hear your parents calling you from downstairs. You type in a quick message, waiting for the reply before turning your laptop off. //sent by fireba11// ''Re: daylight'' Thank you. I have to go now. I'll be sure to take you up on your offer. //sent by daylight// ''Re: fireba11'' You can talk to me anytime. [[Go downstairs->Go downstairs]]

//sent by fireba11// ''Re: daylight'' Just a friend. Not even a close one. I just went to visit him in hospital, saw him for the first time in months. //sent by daylight// ''Re: fireba11'' I'm guessing you're a family member, then. The sister? //sent by fireba11// ''Re: daylight'' How the hell did you know? I didn't leave any clues. What told you I wasn't just a friend? //sent by daylight// ''Re: fireba11'' [[This->This post]] post

//posted a day ago by geonormouse// ''Re: Anyone know how Dauntless is handling the defeat?'' If I could give you any info, I would. I'm a friend of his. Only family members are allowed to visit him, or even know which hospital he's at. It's all a massive secret so that nobody takes adavantage of his current weakness. //Ah,// you think to yourself, //shit.// [[Message daylight->Send a Message]]

//sent by fireba11// ''Re: daylight'' Okay, then I'm the sister. Why do you want to know? //sent by daylight// ''Re: fireba11'' I'm just a fan of his. Of yours, too, actually. //sent by fireba11// ''Re: daylight'' A fan of mine? You feel a blush creep onto your cheeks. You have fans? You never realised. If you had, maybe you wouldn't have tried so hard to get people's attention. //sent by daylight// ''Re: fireba11'' Yep. I appreciate how difficult it must be, to have such a famous sibling, with you yourself being largely forgotten in the light of his brilliance. Maybe you even resent him a little - or a lot - for putting your family in danger the way he did. Maybe you feel like your losing him. //sent by fireba11// ''Re: daylight'' It //is// hard. Nobody ever thinks of that. But no, I don't feel like I'm losing him. I lost him a long time ago, when his powers first manifested. What are you, a psychologist or something? //sent by daylight// ''Re: fireba11'' No. Not a psychologist. I'm just good at reading people. It's a useful skill. If you need someone to vent to, I'm here. You hear your parents calling you from downstairs. You type in a quick message, waiting for the reply before turning your laptop off. //sent by fireba11// ''Re: daylight'' Thank you. I have to go now. I'll be sure to take you up on your offer. //sent by daylight// ''Re: fireba11'' You can talk to me anytime. [[Go downstairs->Go downstairs]]

You make your way downstairs to find your parents waiting in the kitchen. [['What is it?'->'What is it?']]

'We're going to visit your brother.' your mother tells you. 'Are you coming?' [['I'll come.'->'I'll come.']] [['We went to see him yesterday, I'll pass this time.'-> I'll stay at home]] (set: $mother to 50) (set: $father to 50)

Your mother is disappointed in you - you can see it in her face. She sighs, and turns to leave. Your father shakes his head regrettfully at you as he closes and locks the door. You feel briefly guilty, but soon shake it away. Only one thing to do now. You [[go back upstairs.->Upstairs]] (set: $mother to ($mother - 5)) (set: $father to ($father - 5))

Your mother smiles. 'He'll be glad to see you.' Your father stands by the door, already spinning his car keys in his fingers. He nods to you. 'We should [[leave->Leave]] now,' he says. (set: $mother to ($mother + 5)) (set: $father to ($father + 5))

The car is cold, and you complain briefly to your parents, who turn the heater on. It is a long ride to the hospital. Putting him in one closer to home would be dangerous - the local hospital is beseiged by searching reporters daily. It is a good thing he is not there. After around an hour, you [[arrive->Hospital]].

//Hello, fireba11, and welcome to the Hero Board.// You scroll through the top posts, flinching at every mention of Dauntless. His name pops up a lot. It was bound to. With everything that's been going on, he has been the centre of a media storm, as has his family. You scan the posts, trying to decide if you should look at them or not. You know that you could give detailed information, more than anyone else possibly could, but you're not sure if you could stomach seeing what people are saying about him. You decide to take a quick look. Which post do you visit? [[Anyone know how Dauntless is handling the defeat?->Anyone know how Dauntless is handling the defeat?]] [[Any information on the new villain?->Any information on the new villain?]] [[Dauntless Discussion Thread->Dauntless Discussion Thread]] (set: $one to false) (set: $two to false) (set: $three to false)

You head back upstairs. For the second time, you have a new PM. This time, however, it is from somebody you know. You smile. You haven't heard from him for a while. [[Open the message->New Message 2]]

The sterile white halls of the hospital give you the creeps. They always have, ever since you were tiny. You don't know why. Your brothers room is private, and your parents have to verify their identities before being allowed to see him, despite having visited often in the past. He lies in a clean white bed. To look at him, you would think nothing was wrong, but you know that his torso is covered in bandages. He is only alive due to the will of his attacker. The reason for his survival remains a mystery. [['Hello, Andrew.'->Hello Andrew]] you say.

//sent by davidafar// ''re: fireba11'' sorry 2 hear about ur brother. details are scarce, nobodies giving information //sent by fireba11// ''re: davidafar'' Good to hear from you again! I know there aren't many details online or in newspapers. It's so that no other villains can use them to take him down again. //sent by davidafar// ''re: fireba11'' again, im really sorry :( hes an awesome chosen, as chosens go. hope hes back on his feet soon //sent by fireba11// ''re: davidafar'' Let's not talk about him. I just want to forget about hoim at the moment, y'know? Let's talk about normal things. //sent by davidafar// ''re: fireba11'' like what //sent by fireba11// ''re: davidafar'' Like... I don't know, you installing an autocorrect on your computor. //sent by davidafar// ''re: fireba11'' stop bugging me about that weve spoken about it u know i cant be bothered //sent by fireba11// ''re: davidafar'' I'm sorry, it's just really annoying to read. //sent by davidafar// ''re: fireba11'' if ur gonna bug me ill just leave //sent by fireba11// ''re: davidafar'' No, don't go. I need someone to talk to. //sent by davidafar// ''re: fireba11'' ugh i keep trying to read past chats to see what weve talked about before and forgetting that it deletes them now >:( //sent by fireba11// ''re: davidafar'' Yeah, must be annoying. In other news, I got 80% on my English mock You chat with David for almost an hour and a half, until eventually he has to go. It's good to speak to him again. You were beginning to worry that you wouldn't be able to start up another conversation - that your oldest friend would be lost, like so many others. Of course, you've never met David. All of your friends are online. You find it hard to speak to people at school - they either want to get closer to your brother through you, or they're scared of getting caught up in the drama of having a Chosen as a twin. Due to this, you never formed any real-life connections. Your parents should be back soon. Until this event, you decide to play games on your laptop. You do this until the doorbell rings. [[Ignore it->Parents are home]] [[Answer it->Answer the doorbell]]

He smiles when he sees you. 'Hey there.' 'How are you feeling?' you ask him. 'I'm okay. Healing fast, thanks to my abilities!' he flashes a quick grin. Your parents seem to sense the need for you to be alone, as your father suggests to your mother that they go and get a coffee from the canteen. Your mother agrees, and your parents leave. You sit down on the corner of the bed. 'So, how are you really?' 'Awful. My advice? Don't get beaten up. Hurts like a bitch.' 'Not surprised, to be honest. You did get beat pretty bad.' 'They haven't let me look at the internet, or at any newspapers. How are people taking it?' he asks. 'I had a look at the boards today. I'm not going to lie to you - some have lost all faith in you. But others are taking it okay. They're worried, and quite rightly, but they still support you.' He smiles again, letting his head fall back to the pillow. 'That's good. Not about the ones who have lost hope, about the others.' Your parents return, clutching steaming cups of coffee. The rest of your time is spent sitting at the end of Andrew's bed listening to them talk to him. They ask him how he is doing, and tell him what's been going on with his friends,or those of the family. They talk about everything but his defeat. After about an hour, your brother expresses his need to rest. You have a hunch that he only does this so soon because he knows you are bored. You and your parents [[return home->Back Home]].

You play for another hour or so, then hear the car pull into the driveway. You head downstairs to welcome your parents home. You wait in the kitchen. You hear the car door open, followed by a long scream, then running. You race to the door and pull it open. A man is curled in feotal position on your front step. (text-colour: "red")[Blood] stains his face and torso, shirt torn to show several deep cuts in his side. Your mother kneels next to him, frantically checking for a pulse. 'Mark!' she yells to your father, 'Mark, call an ambulance right now!' Your father fumbles with his phone. Your mother rocks back on her heels, one hand pressed against her mouth. 'He's alive.' she says. You stand, frozen. 'Get a blanket!' she tells you. You do so, draping it over the man. Sirens proceed up the road, an ambulance screeching to a stop next to your house. Two paramedics are soon on the scene, moving the man onto a stretcher and carrying him away. Although it only takes about fifteen minutes, it feels like it's been hours by the time the ambulance screeches away. [[It's all over now.->Save]] (set: $survival_chance to 0) (set: $parents to true)

A man stands on the doorstep. (text-colour: "red")[Blood] is smeared over his face and torso, his shirt torn to shown long cuts rended deep into his side. One arm is clutched around his stomach, pressing a wad of cloth against a gaping wound. His other hand reaches toward you. 'Please...' he pleads, 'Help me. Please help- help me. Please.' He seems to be delirious. Suddenly, he collapses, curled into a ball on your front step. [[Take him inside, then call an ambulance.->Take him inside]] [[Don't move him, just call an ambulance.->Don't move him]] (set: $survival_chance to 1) (set: $parents to false)

You return home to find a a man curled on your doorstep.He is covered in (text-colour: "red")[blood], his shirt torn to show several deep lacerations in his side. Your mother immediately runs to his side, frantically checking for a pulse.Glancing over her shoulder, she yells back to you and your dad: 'Someone call an ambulance! //Quickly!//' You fumble for your phone, almost misdialling. //'Hello, what is your emergency?'// 'We need an ambulance.' you rattle off your address. //'Can you tell me what's happened?'// 'I'm not sure. There's a man, on our doorstep. He's covered in blood. I don't know if he's breathing or not-' Your mother calls from the mans side 'He is!' '-he's breathing.' you correct yourself. 'But he's unconcious. Deep lacerations in his side.' //'What information can you tell us about the patient?'// 'He looks to be in his early twenties, but that's about all I can tell. We don't know him.' //'Thank you. Help is on its way. Please stay on the line.'// You place the phone on the bonnet of the car, shaking slightly from the shock. Your father has gone inside to get a blanket, draping it over the man. It doesn't take long for the ambulance to arrive. Two paramedics move the man onto a stretcher, and take him into the back of the ambulance. Although it feels like hours, it has only been around fifteen minutes since you got home. At least the ordeal is [[over now->Save]]. (set: $survival_chance to 1) (set: $parents to true)

You can't very well pick him up, so have to half-drag, half-lift him to your sofa and then haul him onto it. You drape a blanket over him. //'Hello, what is your emergency?'// 'We need an ambulance.' you rattle off your address. //'Can you tell me what's happened?'// 'I'm not sure. There's a man, on our doorstep. He's covered in blood. He's breathing, but he's unconcious. Deep lacerations in his side. A wound to his stomach.' //'What information can you tell us about the patient?'// 'He looks to be in his early twenties, but that's about all I can tell. I don't know him, he just turned up.' //'Thank you. Help is on its way. Please stay on the line.'// You clutch the phone tightly in your hand, sinking to your knees beside the man. Almost not knowing why, you take his hand, holding it as you wait. It doesn't take long for the ambulance to arrive. Two paramedics move the man onto a stretcher, and take him into the back of the ambulance. Although it feels like hours, it has only been around fifteen minutes since the doorbell rang. At least the ordeal is [[over now->Save]]. (set: $survival_chance to 0)

You fumble for your phone, almost misdialling as you call for an ambulance. //'Hello, what is your emergency?'// 'We need an ambulance.' you rattle off your address. //'Can you tell me what's happened?'// 'I'm not sure. There's a man, on our doorstep. He's covered in blood. He's breathing, but he's unconcious. Deep lacerations in his side. A wound to his stomach.' //'What information can you tell us about the patient?'// 'He looks to be in his early twenties, but that's about all I can tell. I don't know him, he just turned up.' //'Thank you. Help is on its way. Please stay on the line.'// You clutch the phone tightly in your hand, sinking to your knees beside the man. Almost not knowing why, you take his hand, holding it as you wait. It doesn't take long for the ambulance to arrive. Two paramedics move the man onto a stretcher, and take him into the back of the ambulance. Although it feels like hours, it has only been around fifteen minutes since the doorbell rang. At least the ordeal is [[over now->Save]].

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(if: $parents is false)[You fill your parents in when they arrive home.] You and your parents sit together. Your mother has made you a cup of tea to calm you down. 'Don't worry.' she reassures you. 'You did the right thing. (if: $parents is true)[We all did.]' You sigh. 'I hope the guy is okay.' 'I'm sure he will be.' your mother wraps you in a hug. 'Stop stressing, okay? I'll check up on him tomorrow, and I'll let you know before you go to school.'

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Welcome to Made a Mistake

In this tale of woe, you will have to try your best not to make the aforsaid mistake.

A few things you should know:
- The way you act decides how others feel about you. Their opinions of you will not be stated openly, but will affect the availability of future decisions, as well as how they react to you.
- You will not always be able to please everyone! This is important!
- The same decision will effect different people in different ways - for instance, a decision that would make an easily befriended person instantly like you may only raise you slightly in the eyes of one less easy to please.
- This is a massive project, and as such may contain some mistakes (ironically, considering the name!). Please try to enjoy it despite these issues.
- This is my first project of this kind. I am very much an amateur. I am focusing on telling a story, rather than fancy coding and graphics. I am writer at heart.

This is an interactive story by FinchGold
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